Blog #13

Today in class we discussed a time line of our descriptive essay with Mrs. Crawford and a team member from our group. She told us how we should be very descriptive in our writing. For example, instead of “The cat ran down the street”, you could say “The black with brown spots cat ran furiously down the street”. Like she said you have a more visual picture in your head with the second example, rather than your first. You really just want to be describing with good details the video that you pick, if someone were reading your paper about the vlog you picked you want them to be able to have a clear visual picture in their head. You want to have all your senses in the essay, and if you don’t know them they are sound, taste, feeling, smell, sight. Sound you want to use voice, background. Taste you really can’t do unless the video is over food. Feeling you want to describe the emotion’s the person is using. Smell you most likely won’t use, and sight to describe the persons background. Mrs. Crawford told us that for the beginning you want to use sound, visual, and feeling. Preferably the best length of the video is 5-6 minutes. Before she had explained how to write the essay, I thought it was one of those 6 paragraphs that I use to write in middle school and high school. After she told us how it was going to be written, it seemed a lot easier to me. All you really do is talk about the video and just describe what he or she is doing. The girl is riding a bike, you can add her emotions, race, how fast, what kind of bike. It is all about creating a vision for the reader. The timeline helped because it is a guide that shows you where to put the ideas in your essay. For example, if you have 6 paragraphs, the third and fourth are the middle paragraphs. Definitely the time line helped me a lot because it changed the outlook I had of what we were having to do.