Blog #10 Difference between blog & email essay

Reflecting on blog #3’s email and the email I am writing are two completely different papers. They are both talking about complaining about your grade. The blog was an email to your friend and the email etiquette essay was to your professor. When you are writing to your friend you can talk in slang, but when you are writing to your professor you need to be precise with what you are talking about. I cursed in the paper to my friend, but I would never think about cursing to my professor. The email etiquette essay was a lot harder because you it required a lot more thought. You need to make sure you had a thesis statement, a good middle paragraph, and a conclusion for your reader to know what you want to happen. The email etiquette takes a lot more thought. A journal is really just off the top of your head nothing to hard or serious. You know the email etiquette essay is serious, when you have to go to the writing center to get your paper checked before you can turn it in. The blog is 300 words with whatever you feel like writing about the topic that is given to you, on the email essay you had to construct a short essay in a way that was not confusing. You didn’t want to repeat, have incorrect grammar, no contractions, basically a lot of things to make your paper bad. Like I previously stated the biggest difference is that in one your writing to your friend, and the other your professor who has the ball in his hands if you are going to pass the class or not! Lol. Definitely a different type of mind when you go into writing these two different papers, but you can easily adapt to whichever one your doing.

Summary of 9/21

On Monday September 22, 2009 in Mrs. Crawford’s class we got into our groups and discussed each one of our email etiquette assignments. There were four people in our group, we were missing Steven. First I read my email, and they critiqued my paper. Each one of them told me something I could do to make my email better. They gave me ideas on how I could add or delete some things. Also when I was reading it out loud to them, I could see my mistakes. I could see things while I was reading, and thought in my head this makes no sense. I guess you don’t see your mistakes when you are writing your paper at 2:30 am, and wanting to go to bed. Lol! Definitely after reading it, I needed to change some things, and go get help from the writing center. This by the way I scheduled for Tuesday at 4:45 pm. Brandon, Daniel, and Richard also read their emails, so what they did for me, I did for them also. Also some ideas popped into my head from their essays that I did not add in mine. We all had work to do on ours; none of ours were perfect like we wanted them to be. You also came into our group, and talked about some things with us. For example, telling us we should include who we are since teachers like yourself have so many students to remember. Also helping Daniel with his paper to make it longer, plus putting more ideas into our papers. We finished doing the group huddle, and you talked to the class about what needs to go in your paper again. I think some of the students were confused on what to do. Anyways you re-stated on what needed to be done, and how we need to schedule an appointment as soon as possible. Other than that you dismissed us, then went on to our next class

Blog #8 Summarization of Friday Articles

The journal today was over the 4 articles that my group, Group #2 presented. The four articles were “The Dating Detectives”, “Getting Back Into It”, “Internet Dating 2.0”, and “Is eHarmony Biased Against Gays?”. The one I talked about in class was “The Dating Detectives”. This article was about this man named Vikas Sharma who started dating someone online. His relationship with whoever this woman is began having a more advance relationship! They would meet up with each other for several months. The bad thing about that is that their was no common link as in no one in the middle of them. He soon hired a detective to see what his potential spouse was doing. He ended up finding out that she had checked into another man in a hotel. Vikas Sharma ended up calling it off with that woman. Detective agencies such as Globe Group have made a lot of business! Dating detective will try to discover as much information as possible from whoever their supposed to find the information from. In India, when your dating somebody from another country you are extra careful who you talk to! That’s why they hire detectives. That’s what the “Dating Detectives” is mainly about.
In “Is eHarmony Biased Against Gay?”, its about people saying eHarmony being biased against gays! Gays are complaining about how on eHarmony there is not an opportunity when you apply to talk men to men, its man seeking woman, and woman seeking man. Neil Clark Warren is the creator of eHarmony and says there is plenty of sites for gays to get on. He says how manhunt has 21, 739 gay men online! I don’t see the big deal, I think John Cloud or whoever the gay guy is overreacting because eHarmony isn’t the only dating website on the internet! If Neil Clark Warren wants to only have men seeking women, viseversa that’s his decision. That’s all I have to say about that article.
“Internet Dating 2.0” is just talking about how all the websites that are available for people to use. Honestly mrs. Crawford I can’t remember this one I don’t have the article, and it won’t open on my computer! Sorry!
Last but not least “Getting Back Into It” talks about how people that have gotten older are getting back into dating and such things. It gives example such as 54 year old Sally Salners dating her 33 year old boyfriend! There are its bad effects of getting back into dating by the internet such as Gale Shamama getting stabbed by the person she met over online! As for me I met my girlfriend over myspace, and we’ve been together a year and a half since then. Other ways of getting back into dating are tagging along with friends and just hanging out with close friends. Another concern is of course HIV and AIDS! Those are some methods on how to get back into dating whether your 20 or 65, and that’s the summarization of “Getting Back Into It”
Finally that’s the end of this journal! Lol That’s what happened in class, and those are the summarizations in my opinion of the articles! Goodnight

Email Etiquette Journal

I learned a lot about the Email Etiquette Assignment we discussed in class today. Personally I thought that their wasn’t a whole lot to do when you are writing an email to someone. You would think that it’s just a simple writing assignment, but it really isn’t! Their are a lot of things you can do to create a good email. The first step for Email format is using the MLA format. It includes double spacing, white paper, black ink, and Times Roman Numeral (12 pt). Also preferably you would like to use 1st or 3rd person such as he, she, they, I, etc. You want to avoid using slang or text messaging language. You want to write it like your writing a email to your professor, not your best friend for five years! When writing your email you want to consider who your audience is going to be. Also the purpose and how much does the person know about the subject. Most important you want to have a developed introduction. Another thing that is very important is fully developed paragraphs, a thesis, and a discussion section. If you don’t know a thesis is a statement of purpose to help the reader understand what your talking about in your email. After your completed body paragraphs, you want to end with a conclusion. The conclusion is mainly you telling the audience of what you want to happen. You don’t want to end your email with words like in conclusion, and finally. What you would like to happen is the reader coming to the same agreement as you do. Like Mrs. Crawford said if your complaining about your grade to an a instructor you want to say “thank for your time”. Then when your done you want to revise it, and you shouldn’t have any grammar errors, sentence errors, correct grammar usage, and no punctuation errors. If you do all the things that I’ve listed in this journal, I can guarantee you a great email assignment!! Thank you for your time to read my journal

-Jesse Castor III

Summarizing Two Articles From Group #4

Well today September 11th, 2009 Group #4 presented their four articles to the class, and like last class we discussed all four articles that the group had presented. The four articles that they had were "Where PHones in Class Are Ok", "E Campus News", "How to get schools out of the 20th Century", and finally "Al Gore: Should schools be wired to the internet". They were all interesting articles, but I would like to summarize and discuss two of them. Those two are "Where Phones in Class Are OK" and " E Campus News". "Where Phone in Class Are OK" was a article about students learning how to create apps for the iPhone in class courses. You would never think that their would be a class at a University that was created to make apps for the iPhone. It says that the stupider the app, the more sales you get. For some odd reason people like to have the stupid apps, rather than the important ones! Haha! For example, their is an app which is called the "Party Music Strobe" which shines a strobe light to the beat of any song! Another one was called "DoGood" which is you do a good deed once a day. Believe it or not, this app was downloaded about 500 times a day! Wow! The students that create these apps can net more than 1,000 dollars, only downfall is that Apple keeps about 30% of that. This class is not required, but students take it for the learning experience, a future career, and a way to make money. Last but not least a New Jersey student didn't know what he wanted to do with his life, but turns out now that he is being paid to do apps for the Blackberry! To me its quite amazing how technology is becoming so advanced, and how apps are being created by students like myself! Overall though this article I really enjoyed! The other article that I would like to discuss and summarize about is "E Campus News" about new iPod rules touch off heated debate. This article is saying how the University of Missouri is requiring for incoming students to have an iPhone, iPod, Touch, or something relatively close to that. People are complaining how they are making them buy the devices themselves. At Abilene Christian University, they gave away free iPhone, yet you still had to pay the monthly rate. However at the University of Missouri, you have to pay for the device and the monthly rate! Thats ridiculous in my opinion, what happens if I already have a good phone? Or if I couldn't afford to buy it? Those are questions that I would ask them. Votes pertaining to this argument are 40% in support, and the 60% against it. They do say the $229 charge to buy the device would be in comparison of two or three books. Honestly though, I would hate having to learn off of my iPhone!! I don't think I could be focused enough, and I'm a visual learner not off the phone type. I wouldn't go to a university for that particular reason. Anyways those are summarizations about the two articles, and my point of view. Hope you enjoy it and have a good weekend! :)

Summarizing & Discussing Two Articles

Well today Group #3 discussed the four stories that we had to print out over the internet. All of the stories were interesting, and I enjoyed expressing my opinion with the class. This journal is about summarizing two out of the four articles that we talked about in class. The first one I would like to talk about is the article from Forbes.com about “Reading, Writing, iPhoning.” This is basically talking about certain colleges giving incoming freshman new iphones. Also in classes that you’ll use the iphone to check your syllabi, receive emergency alerts, some professors holding classes online, and tuning into podcasts uploaded by the professor. It’s basically saying your iphone is what you’re going to be using pretty much in your classes. This may seem pretty cool, but at Abilene Christian you have to pay the monthly AT&T bill. Also if the student decides to leave he or she will be asked to pay a pro-rated amount for using the phone. In class I remember Mrs. Crawford asked if we would rather have an iPhone or a laptop, and personally I would rather have a laptop. I think if we used the iPhone for class it would be to much technology. Your iPhone is pretty much going to be the reason you pass the class. It would also take students learning how to adapt to using such a technology based cellular device. Not to mention having professors that may not even have cell phones, learning how to teach their class over a phone. Also what happens if you already have a cell phone and it’s not with AT&T. I think it’s a ridiculous idea, and is just a bribe to get you to go to their school. Personally though I wouldn't go to a school just to have an iPhone! Lol! The second story I would like to summarize and express my opinion about it “eCampus News” This article is saying how Purdue University is using online signals. When I’m saying “signals” it’s telling students if their grades are dropping, offer study-habit suggestions, and provide support. There is a green, yellow, and red light. This is meaning that green you are doing great and are at top of the class, yellow is in the middle of the class, and red is pretty much saying your failing. It helps the professors monitor the student’s behavior. I would love having the green, yellow, and red light because I would like to know how I’m doing in the class. That’s what I kind of don’t like with SAC, I wish I could have online all my grades for the class, so I can keep up to date with how I’m doing in my classes. If I had a red light I would tell myself “you need to get your head in the game” Its kind of a wake up call if you do get a red light. Personally this article I like and I wish SAC did have the online signals. Well that is how I feel about both articles!

Reflecting

I would say reflecting back on today's discussion went really good to me. Mrs. Crawford talked about the syllabus that we now have on the internet on our PALS account. The syllabus tells us what we are going to be doing for class until December 4th! It's cool that we have a syllabus because we can look and see what we'll be doing the next time we go to English class. Before this I was always texting my friend Emily from the 8am class to see what we were doing in her class today. Lol! I would say so far I've liked English class better than any of my other classes. Mrs. Crawford seems like a really cool teacher. She seems hands on, and will make sure to explain everything to us. She’s nice, laidback, and I think with her she will get us prepared for the next level of English! It seems like we're going to have lots of work, but it will keep us busy and entertained! I tend to hate boring classes a lot because I don’t focus alot. I'm kind of excited to do that essay on the comparison of Facebook and Myspace. In high school we couldn’t even have access to those sites. Lol! Also during the year we'll have alot of group presentations, and I think that's pretty cool. If you don't have chemistry with your group, most likely you'll get a bad grade. My group is Group#2, and we had our first presentation over Chapter 3. I think we did pretty good, but we could have fixed some things. It was challenging because their really wasn't that much information for 5 people to talk about different things. It seemed like we kept repeating things. It was the first presentation so their’s nothing to worry about we’ll be better prepared. I am the group leader, and I definitely think our group will win all the competitions. All the guys are hardworking, and I know that we will get all our work done. Anyways looking back I’ve enjoyed it, and can’t wait to see what’s in store!

Complaining about the grade I received!

Natalie,

Remember that essay that I had to write for my English class? I worked so hard to get a good grade on it!! You remember I did everything possible to get an A! Well today she gave us the essay back, and I got a freaking 72!! I’m so pissed off!!! I for sure I would definitely have gotten an A on it! I was having such a good day until this happened, I’m so upset! I could understand if I hadn’t tried or put forth my full effort, but I busted my butt on getting a better grade than a freaking 72! I ended up talking to her after class, and she was critiquing me on the littlest things! It ended up being that all these little things combined brought my grade to a 72! Spelling, repeating words, incorrect punctuation, and indenting! OMG!!! I can understand taking off points because of these mistakes, but 28 freaking points? Hell no! Lol! Get this, that’s what she said was the only thing wrong about my essay! My paragraphs were good, sentences were complete, good supporting details, and my essay was very focused! It sounds like by her saying this that I would have at least gotten a B+! Ugh, I swear she hates me! She is always critiquing me about my work, I feel like she just grades me harder than everybody else. It’s not fair I hate feeling like this! Mrs. Gaitan also said that we couldn’t fix our essays, and the grade stood as is! With this 72 now, it dropped me from a 91 to an 88! I still can’t get out of my head how I got deducted so many points by the simple things! I understand its college but damn! Lol! She’s such a …..!!! Whatever I’m sorry I had to text you this long text message, but I just had to let it out! Have a good rest of the day ttul!